The Lions Failed Feast Tellagami Video

W.A.L.T make improvements to my writing and present it to an audience.

The Lions Failed Feast

The Lions Failed Feast

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

This is my Recount. I hope you like it!

The Lions Failed Feast

It was a nice early December morning at the African Savannah, my family, my friends and I were sleeping in the nice sun.. Then a lion woke the pride up gently and said, “The herd of buffalo's are coming near us, I think they are sneaking on us!”

Some of the lions were ready to charge but I stopped and said, “First we have to go to that bush and get ready to attack.”

When they came closer, we raced after them, the baby lion was racing super fast to get the calf. When the baby lion caught the calf, the rest of pride came and tried to kill the calf. (Splash), the Crocodile jumped and caught the calf’s tail, and that time there was like a tug of war of the lions and the crocodile.

With joy we pulled out the calf out then the herd of buffalo's came. Some of the lions ran away but the baby lion and my wife were trapped by the buffalo’s. I was coming to save them, but an enormous buffalo came and chased me. Then an enormous buffalo came, and nearly dragged the baby lion and my wife to the river. Then a lion came, jumped and hit a buffalo and ran away from the herd of buffalo’s. After the buffalo's left the lion, the calf was standing up and we thought “How is the calf standing up?
“How is the calf alive?” Then the calf came back to the herd.

I felt like I was the most unlucky lion on Earth. I learnt that our pride will never ever hunt a buffalo.

By Khush

The Lions Failed Feast (First Draft)

W.A.L.T recall events through the eyes of an animal.

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell and feel).
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?

First Draft

The Lions Failed Feast

It was a nice Early October Morning at the African Savannah me, my family and my friends having a nice rest.

When I woke up I saw the herd of Buffalo’s for the first time. Then I woke the pride up gently and said “The herd of Buffalo's are seeking to attack us!” Some of the lions were nearly to charge but my dad stopped and said “First we have to pounce then we can attack the Buffaloes.” I smelled danger heading for them. When they came near we chased after them, I was running super fast to catch the calf. When I caught the calf the pride of lions came and tried to kill the calf. But the crocodile jumped and caught the calf’s tail, and that time there was like a tug of war. Then the lions pulled out the calf out then the herd of Buffalo's came, some of the lions ran away but me and my mum were trapped by the Buffalo’s my dad was coming to save us but an enormous Buffalo came and chased my dad. Then an enormous Buffalo came and nearly dragged me and my mum to the river.

Battle of Kruger National Park Sequence.

W.A.L.T: recall events in order.

	The herd of Buffalo are creeping up on the lions.
	A pride of lions are having a rest.
	The lions are ready to attack the Buffalo.
	When the lions heard some noise by the Buffalo’s the lions woke up and chased the Buffalo's.
	The baby lion was trying to catch the calf.
	When the lions are trying to kill the Calf the Crocodile jumps and catches the Calf and the Crocodile and the Lions are having a tug of war.
	The Lions pull the calf out then the Buffalo's come and surrounded the two lions.
	Some enormous buffalo's charged at the pride.
	The calf was rescued by the herd of buffalo's.